What Underlies (Februrary 12, 2013) in Old OD Entries

I wrote a poem today and I guess I just feel like sharing it.

I see your eyes

Ones that are consumed with self-pity Ones that try to avoid the glances Fear that they will see

I see your heart One that is pining for love One that will always feel the ache of loss and rejection Fear for your lonliness

I see your mind One that is devoured with regret One that is exhausted from thought Fear for your absence of emotion

I see your soul One that is without color One that is beyond redemption Fear for your life

I guess I would like some feedback...What do you guys think?